Maximize Students’
Writing Performance: The Writing Process
By Jill Jenkins
In my early career, I gave
students a writing assignment with little preparation and spent most of my time
grading their creations and writing so many comments on them that they looked
like road maps. When I returned them to
the students, they quickly threw them into the garbage or near the garbage as
they walked out the door. I was
devastated, because all of my hard work was for nothing. Students need to be front loaded with
instruction before they write, look at models and analyze them, provided with
feedback in a peer review situation, allowed to revise their writing, given
feedback by the instructor and allowed to revise again, especially if they have
not written in a basic acceptable manner.
Below are some ideas I have used to help students improve their writing.
The Prompt
First, many students never bother to
read prompts completely or make any effort to understand what the prompt is
asking for. To alleviate this problem, I
give students a worksheet with ten to twenty prompts on it. Put students into their pair/share groups
and discuss each prompt. Then, I have
each group explain what the prompt is asking them to write about.
Circle
the important verbs and highlight the important nouns in each of the following
prompts.
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Compare
and contrast three cartoon characters to determine who is the most human-like.
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Explain
the components of an internal combustion engine.
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Evaluate
three horror movies to determine which is the most frightening. Justify your
answer with details from the movies.
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List
the procedures to fill the stapler with staples and staple your paper.
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Define
and describe three different types of music.
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Compare
and contrast three different energy sources and determine which is the most
efficient.
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Analyze
the motives of Fagin in Oliver Twist.
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Describe
the plot of The Hunger Games.
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Evaluate
the plot of The Hunger Games to determine if the plot is appropriate for
middle school students to read.
The Planning
Second, students don’t know how to
organize their ideas. I used to believe
that giving students an outline or a cluster would stifle their creativity, but
it doesn’t. Most of the students are not
on a level to have any clue how to organize their views, so they just write
whatever is in their head. If they were
studying architecture, they would study the works of the masters in every
style. In writing, we need to take the
same approach. First give them an
outline and an example of an essay that follows the outline. Have them highlight each of the elements in a
different color. I call this the rainbow
essay. Then show them essays that have
no internal structure and have them do the same thing. Discuss with them which essay is easier to
follow and let them discover for themselves. Here is an example of an outline
that I might give my students:
Outline
I.
Introduction
A.
Lead
1.
Quote
2.
Story
3.
Startling
Fact
B.
Definition
of Honor
C.
Characteristics
of a person with honor
1. Characteristic one
2.
Characteristic two
3. Characteristic three
D. Three people who are honorable
1.
John F. Kennedy
2.
Mahatma Gandhi
3.
Mother Teresa
E. Is honorable behavior inherent or bestowed?
II. John
F. Kennedy
A.
First
example of honorable behavior
1.
What
makes this behavior honorable?
2.
What
sacrifice did he make?
3.
Who
did it affect?
4.
What
it his nature or learned behavior?
5.
Quote
1
B.
Second
example of honorable behavior
1.
What
makes this behavior honorable?
2.
What
sacrifice did he make?
3.
Who
did it affect?
4.
What
it his nature or learned behavior?
5.
Quote
2
C.
Example
number three that he is an honorable man
1.
What makes behavior honorable?
2.
What sacrifice did he make?
3. Who did it affect?
4.
What it his nature or learned behavior?
5. Quote 3
D. Refutation
III.
Mahatma
Gandhi
A.
First example of honorable behavior
1.
What
makes this behavior honorable?
2.
What
sacrifice did he make?
3.
Who
did it affect?
4.
What
it his nature or learned behavior?
5.
Quote
4
B.
Second example of honorable behavior
1.
What makes this behavior honorable?
2.
What sacrifice did he make?
3.
Who did it affect?
4.
What it his nature or learned behavior?
5.
Quote 2
C.
Third example of honorable behavior
1. What makes this behavior
honorable?
2. What sacrifice did he make?
3.
Who did it affect?
4. What it his nature or learned
behavior?
5.
Quote 3
D.
Refutation
IV.
Mother
Teresa
A.
First example of honorable behavior
1.
What
makes this behavior honorable?
2.
What sacrifice did she make?
3.
Who did it affect?
4.
What it her nature or learned behavior?
5.
Quote 4
B.
Second example of honorable behavior.
1.
What
makes this behavior honorable?
2.
What sacrifice did she make?
3.
Who did it affect?
4.
What it her nature or learned behavior?
5.
Quote 2
C.
Third example of honorable behavior
1. What makes this behavior honorable?
2. What sacrifice dids he make?
3.
Who did it affect?
4. What it her nature or learned
behavior
5.
Quote 3
D. Refutation
V.
Conclusion
A.
What
is an honorable person?
B.
What
are the characteristics of a person who is honorable?
C.
Three
examples
1.
John
Kennedy
2.
Mahatma
Gandhi
3.
Mother
Teresa
D.
Is
honor inherent or bestowed?
Third, now it is time for them to
write on the same prompt. Students are
more likely to write about something that they care about. Yes, I know that the
state end of the year test will probably not be on a subject that students care
about, but when you are trying to catch a fish, use bait that they like to
eat. One of the most successful prompts
that I have used is:
The
governor has decided that due to the financial expenses and medical expenses
caused by teenage drivers, the state has decided that only individuals over the
age of 21 years old will be eligible for a driver’s license.
Write
a letter to the governor either supporting his idea or refuting it. Make sure
you use a voice appropriate for formal audience. Write a e-mail to one your friends expressing
your opinion. Your voice can be less
formal, but remember this is a “G” rated classroom, so watch your word choice. Please research the subject to support
whichever side you support.
I
teach ninth grade students who are on the edge of earning their driving permit,
so this subject is very important to them.
Since they are adolescents and lack emotional restraint, it is important
to stress the importance of using the right voice and research when
communicating with an authority. Giving
them an opportunity to write in two different voices shows them the
difference. Furthermore, I tell them all
swear words can be recorded as “SLKD75531DJ”.
To avoid parents’ writing their
students’ essay, (which they do) I have them write their rough draft in
longhand in class. They have to give me
their first draft at the end of the period.
This gives me a chance to pursue them and add a few comments before they
begin again. Don’t overwhelm them with
red ink. Just make one or two
suggestions. I return their rough drafts to them the next day so they can type
them into our writing program, My Access. While they write, I circulate the
room offering assistant and suggestions.
I find this is a really good time to provide one on one instruction to
students. When the writing assignment
becomes their end of the year test, they are on their own, but until then, I am
there to offer assistant and instruction.
The Peer Editing
Fourth, I print copies of their
essays and armed with the rubric you will find at the bottom of the page, I
talk each student through the process of evaluating their partner’s paper. It is important to use a rubric, because
students have not internalized what is good writing and what is poor writing. When they see the mistakes their partner
makes, it makes them see those same errors in their own writing. The form below can be used as it is, or you can just use the section related the the writing trait you are focusing on. Each student
is armed with a telephone made from two PVC Hub Elbows and glued together with
a PVC coupler. I saw these at a workshop
to improve students’ reading. (See the
picture below.) They allow the students to read aloud without disturbing the
students near them because the sound goes directly from their mouth through the
pipe to their ear. I had my husband make them for me and he improved upon them
by using heavy and larger PVC pipes.
They work wonderfully well, because the students take the time to read
the entire piece instead of scanning it.
They are able to find more errors without feeling embarrassed because
they read poorly (or because they believe they read poorly).
The peer
editing form that I give my students looks like the one below, but keep in mind
I vary mine depending upon what skill I am teaching. It could also be varied
depending on the age and level in which your students write.
Evaluation of
Writing
Content and
Organization:
- Does each paragraph contain
7-10 sentences
- Is there an introductory
paragraph containing
- A lead (a series of
questions, a thought provoking quote, a story, or a startling fact)
- Three sub-points (reasons)
- A thesis statement
- A conclusion?
- Is there a second paragraph
containing:
- A topic sentence containing
sub-point one
- Three examples or
supporting facts
- Commentary on each example
or fact
- A concluding sentence?
- Is there a third paragraph
containing:
- A topic sentence containing
sub-point two
- Three examples or
supporting facts
- Commentary on each example
or fact
- A concluding sentence?
- Is there a fourth paragraph
containing:
- A topic sentence containing
sub-point three
- Three examples or
supporting facts
- Commentary on each example
or fact
- A concluding sentence?
- Is there a fifth paragraph
containing:
- A refutation
- Supporting evidence and
analysis
- Is there a sixth paragraph
containing:
- A summary of all three
sub-points
- A restatement of the thesis
- A strongly worded
conclusion
- Is there transition words or
phrases like:
- First,
- Second
- Third
- For example
- In another instance
- In conclusion,
- Score the paper
- 5 points Practically
Perfect, a Mary Poppins’ paper
- 4 points Almost there . .
.maybe just missing transition words
- 3 points So-So Its okay,
but it could be better
- 2 points Not even close
- 1 point Not even in the
ballpark
Voice and Word
Choice
- Does the paper use any of
the following words: I, Me, We, My or You?
- Does the paper use any
informal language like: kids, mom, dad?
- Find ten words that are weak
words highlight them and offer another choice.
- Find a passive voice
sentence highlight it and revise it to be an active voice sentence.
- Grade this section:
- 5 points Practically
Perfect, a Mary Poppins’ paper
- 4 points Almost there . . .
- 3 points So-So Its okay,
but it could be better
- 2 points Not even close
- 1 points Not even in the
ballpark
Sentence Fluency:
- Write down the first five
words of the first ten sentences:
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- Revise these sentences so
they all begin with a different pattern
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- Count the words in each of
these sentences. If they are all the same or similar in length, there is a
problem.
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- _______________________________________________________________________________
- ________________________________________________________________________________
- Find examples of a simple
sentence._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
- Find examples of a compound
sentence._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
- Find examples of a complex
sentence._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
- Find examples of a
compound-complex sentence sentence._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
- Evaluate their Sentence
Fluency
- 5 points Practically
Perfect, a Mary Poppins’ paper
- 4 points Almost there . . .
- 3 points So-So Its okay,
but it could be better
- 2 points Not even close
- 1 point Not even in the
ballpark
Conventions
- Proof-read the paper for
spelling, grammar, and usage mistakes
- Grade this section
- 5 points Practically
Perfect, a Mary Poppins’ paper 1-2 errors
- 4 points Almost there . . .
3-5 errors
- 3 points So-So Its okay,
but it could be better 5-7 errors
- 2 points Not even close
7-10 errors
- 1 point Not even in the
ballpark more than 10 errors.
Comments
After our peer editing, I give my students
another week to complete their papers. I have debated the time. If you give them too much time, they simply
forget to do it; however, if you get them too few days, their parents will be in the
office complaining that you’re putting too much pressure on their
students.
Final
Versions
After the
students turn in their final versions and you correct them, you need to set a
minimum standard of excellence they have to achieve to receive any credit. Allow any student an opportunity to revise
his/her paper if he/she is unhappy with his/her grade, but those who have not
achieved the minimum requirements, must revise and resubmit. It also means that as a teacher you need to
make yourself available before or after school to tutor those students. Most schools have an end of the year test
that requires students demonstrate competency in writing. Some students find writing difficult and
painful, so they just don’t try. Once
they learn they can achieve the minimum requirement, they will do it without
being forced. They just must learn to
believe in themselves. Please do not
return their papers looking like a road map with every error circle,
highlighted and commented on. The
students will throw them in the garbage.
Instead of over-whelming them, it is better to select one or two items
that you are focusing on and only comment on them. My theory is to give them two complements to
every suggestion. Remember as Walter
Westley Smith says,
“Writing is easy. Just open a vein and bleed.” Imagine
how painful it is for an insecure adolescent.